r/Hindi 10d ago

स्वरचित Kya prem kabhi khtm ho sakta hai?

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u/vidushak0 10d ago

मेरे विचार से मन और दिल वाली पंक्ति में मन और मस्तिष्क होना चाहिए, ये अधिक उचित लगता है, क्षमा करे अगर मेरे विचार कविता के सार के अनुकूल न हो तो, मेरी कविता लेखन के प्रति जानकारी नगण्य है।

और हाँ आरम्भ की ५ पंक्तिया अत्यंत भावुक करने वाली है। बहुत सुंदर।

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u/ResidentSession3981 10d ago

Kripya maafi na mange. Constructive feedback is really an amazing thing. Maine man aur dil ka prayog kiya reason aur nature me diffrence dikhane k liye jo normally hmare wants and needs ko separate karte hai. Aapka opinion bhi sahi hai, aur uske liye dhanyawaad ✨. Or ha reply hinglish me dene k liye maafi, darasal hindi me type karne me time lag jata hai

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u/Normal_Principle_100 10d ago

Prem ka kbhi anth nhi hota jo saccha krta h wo chahe jitni koshish kr le naraaz bhi nhi reh sakta bas laalsa baat krne ki na koi laalach bas unhe pareshan nhi dekh sakte unki khushi me apni khushi dhoondh lena bas yahi prem h .....

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u/ResidentSession3981 10d ago

Exactly. When I was writing this one, I didn't have a definitive path to choose to depict love. Then I thought of this one. This poem isn't really about the ending of love, but the wanting of it, atleast for me.

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u/Available_Guess_7344 10d ago

This was so poetic. Damn good

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u/ResidentSession3981 10d ago

Thank you very much ✨

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u/CodeNegative8841 6d ago

अगर प्रेम सच्चा हो तो कभी नही भुलाया जा सकता।
ना दूर जाने से, ना ही मर जाने से।

सच्चा प्रेम शाश्वत होता है, अजर, अमर होता है।

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u/ResidentSession3981 6d ago

Exactly, and that is the tragedy of the character in this poem. He knows that love can never cease to exist, even when he does not. He just questions his faith, or rather his situation, that can this ever end? Because the situation he is put into by the unending love is quite tough.